i appreciated it as a poem - great vivid writing.
sorry to be so blunt - i wasn't offended exactly - maybe taken off-guard is more like it.
i admire your way with words.
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"My experience has shown me that I all too often tend to deny that which lies behind, but as I still believe, that which is denied cannot be healed." Brennan Manning, "All is Grace - A Ragamuffin Memoir"