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#418531 - 12/08/12 11:36 PM a rage filled poem
firebird Offline

Registered: 03/29/12
Posts: 26
Loc: the western hemisphere
help with grammer and spelling appreacted greatly
its a spoken word peice but i felt the need to share anyway

its almost impossible to know anything about wine
the paper fire engine
the how can i best cheapen the human heart
the beauty industrys for tarting up bitches
the places that reek of putrefaction is were you go to find
to poison is your only avalible reaction
a sign of your manufature
to saturate and dissipate all that is clean
not a man but a spleen pumping out bile
a style in the eye of what ever is left
the bloated bulbus swetty body of lies and half truths
able only to speak of value in terms of exploitation a language of condemnation your means of spitting hate
your lifes work the content of an ash tray
you seek to make punish
nothing sacrosanct all lines can be smuged with the rotting blood that is what you call good and wholesome
your truth long ago discarded inlue of convince
you are as sterile and devoid of life as the moon
and i love you and i had such high hopes for you
when i was i child i looked up to you
but you were just to dam cheap and vicious to do anything but succeed and in doing so utterly failed

Edited by firebird (12/09/12 12:50 AM)
'The flower you love is not in danger...I'll draw you a muzzle for your sheep...I'll draw you a fence for your flower...I' I didn't know what to say. How clumsy I felt! I didn't know how to reach him, where to find him...It's so mysterious, the land of tears.

#418566 - 12/09/12 09:45 AM Re: a rage filled poem [Re: firebird]
peroperic2009 Offline

Registered: 10/09/11
Posts: 3856
Loc: South-East Europe
Wow, nice song firebird, so full of rage, you let it out, good work.
Unfortunately my knowledge of English is not sufficient to be able to assist you with some advice, lol

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