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#409638 - 09/09/12 10:05 PM The Fall of Man *Triggers*
BeautyforAshes Offline


Registered: 08/27/12
Posts: 32
Loc: Central PA
The Fall of Man


An empty room
of an old farm house,
down the hall began
to turn in on itself.

A clogged drain,
desperate to break free,
a chugging spiral downward.
A dance, really; darkened, elongated

movement.

His naked haste
to call the boy here—
there were words, certainly,
but lost in screaming silence

of the reeling moment,
rag-doll-thrown on the ground.
Taking it in, the boy sputters and
coughs, like on a cigarette taken too early.

He wants to vomit;
instead, he gags and spits
phlegm, fluid, mucus on the floor.
The boy staggers, lurches, darts

from the room, the isolated farm house,
the surrounding fields. Bright sun stabs
into his eyes, what he has seen, tasted,

felt.

The screen door slaps
the doorframe, shuddering.
Humid haze presses the clouds down;
he feels a shortness of breath, then, nothing,

numbness, a swallowing of the pill—a serpent’s bitter fruit.

B4A


Edited by BeautyforAshes (09/09/12 10:34 PM)
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#409643 - 09/09/12 10:31 PM Re: The Fall of Man [Re: BeautyforAshes]
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Registered: 02/07/06
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Loc: settling in the USA again
too real.

communicates so strongly.

i'm shaking.

maybe needs a trigger warning.
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#409644 - 09/09/12 10:35 PM Re: The Fall of Man [Re: traveler]
BeautyforAshes Offline


Registered: 08/27/12
Posts: 32
Loc: Central PA
Traveler,

Thank you for reading. I'm sorry I didn't put a trigger warning on the title. I've corrected that. I hope this doesn't offend you. That's not why I shared it.

B4A
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#409661 - 09/10/12 03:17 AM Re: The Fall of Man [Re: BeautyforAshes]
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i appreciated it as a poem - great vivid writing.
sorry to be so blunt - i wasn't offended exactly - maybe taken off-guard is more like it.
i admire your way with words.
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